When it comes to the topic "Personal Space," most of us will readily agree that it is important and stress relieving. Personal space can give a person a relaxing time and the space to do whatever he or she wants whenever he or she wants without having the pressure to impress or meet the expectations of others. Personal space can also enhance a persons abilities and to do his or her work and or job right.
According to Veronica, "There are many advantages to living in a small home." In other words, Veronica believes that living in a small home is better and easier. Few examples to what Veronica is saying are "saving money (Lower power bills, lower tax bills, and etc.), less maintenance, easier and quicker to clean and environmentally advantageous." I think Veronica is mistaken because she overlooks living with family members and or roommates. By focusing on advantages in living in a small home, Veronica overlooks the deeper problem of personal space. Sure a person can do a little creative decorating but that's not going to full fill a persons personal space because the house is so small and filled with people you would feel the pressure of feeling like someone is watching you.
Personal space not only refers to home but a persons work and or school. Writing in the BBC NEWS/MAGAZINE, Sean Coughlan writes that "Businesses are squeezing more and more people into smaller offices. And the pressure on overcrowded personal space, at home, work and on public transport has never been more intense." In my opinion, a person who does not have personal space at work won't be able to get his or her job done right. The report says that companies expand their staff numbers but their not providing more room because they're saving money. That's where the companies has gone wrong. For example, a company spends $5,000 on refurbishing their office or maybe buying a a bigger office which gives the company's employees better environment to work ten times better than before. Furthermore, this will give the company a boost and will be making ten times the money they spent on a bigger and better place. After all, overcrowded offices, without the relaxation of any privacy, can make people feel insecure. To put it in another way, lack of personal space at work can create a sense of nervousness with people feeling that they're in direct competition with each other and leaving them feeling threatened.
The upshot of all this is that I personally encourage a person to have his or her own personal space because it enhances a persons prosperity. In fact, personal space is good for the health. With all the anger and tension of a person feeling invaded by others, this can cause health problems to a person. A person to have a personal space can help himself or herself in lots of ways. Stress and frustration is out of the way and he or she can finally relax and unwind for their own sake. With personal space, a person can reflect on what he or she has done and try to improve himself or herself to grow and do better. Personal space will give a person the opportunity to do and satisfy his or her wants and needs.
Coughlan, Sean. "Shrinking Office Syndrome." BBC NEWS / MAGAZINE. 20 July 2006. 05 July 2008 http://news.bbc.co.uk/2/low/uk_news/magazine/5193962.stm.
Veronicah. "Living in a Small Home: Advantages and Disadvantages." Gomestic. 22 Aug. 2007. 05 July 2008 http://www.gomestic.com/Home/Living-in-a-Small-Home-Advantages-and-Disadvantages.41348.
Realestate.com. "Creating Personal Space in Your Home." Directory M Articles. 22 Feb. 2007. 05 July 2008
2 comments:
Great balance of they say, I say. but I think your introduction should be a little longer.
The beginning seems very generic. How can you SHOW us this rather than by TELLing us?
Who is Veronica in par2?
Where are your source citations?
At this point, without those, this would be an NP.
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